3/4H Writer of the Week, June 17 2016


Writer of the Week: Jordan Pike

Once upon a time there was a famous King, two armed knights, one fire breathing dragon and lastly a snappy crocodile. They all lived in a massive old castle. Three weeks past when the crocodile and the dragon were planning to wreck the tower. They were bad all along so they went to work. First the dragon took a massive breath and squirted fire at the statue of the King. The King knew what had happened so he sent his guards with a big trap that would cut the dragon and crocodile’s heads off!! The castle was saved and the King lived happily ever after!

Yash Tyagi
One summer morning Mrs Quodling wanted a child so Mr Quodling fetched some vegetables from a witches home. The witch said “Stop! You can give me a princess to live with me.” So the witch took a little girl who was walking past her house and made her a princes. The witch locked her up but a prince saved the princess and they lived happily ever after.

Charlie Fisher
Once upon a time there lived a beautiful princess who lived in a dark and very scary castle. One day a fire breathing dragon came and lit all of the beautiful trees on fire. It damaged the whole place but a water dragon who is a good guy tried to fight the fire dragon. The water dragon won and blew all the fire out of the tress and they all lived happily ever after.

Harry Fisher
Once there was a beautiful princess called Alice. One day there was a blue dragon who blew out fire around the castle. Luckily, prince came over the mountains and cut the dragon in half!

Harry Griffiths
Once there lived a beautiful princess. She lived in a castle and loved it. One day a fire breathing dragon blew his fire. It ruined the princess’s castle. So the knights attacked the dragon. The dragon got mad! Luckily the knights defeated the dragon.

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Persuasive Writing

1st June 2016

Dear Sir/Madam

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Yours sincerely

Charlie Egan
Chocolate Creator


1st June 2016

Dear Sir/Madam

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Yours sincerely

Olivia O’Reilly